Once there was a little girl named Jenna. She had two chocolate labs. Their names were Hersey and Brownie. Every Saturday and Sunday she would drive to Canada. She loved to go there. She would play in the backyard of the log cabin.
When they first started to go to Canada she would leave Heresy and Brownie at home. They had to hire someone to take care of them. They would have to pay them a lot of money to take care of their dogs every weekend. So Jenna said they could to take the dogs to Canada with them. Her parents where not to happy about it but said “yes”. They said” that they would she what happens”.
The next day they started their car to go to Canada but this time with their dogs. It was a beautiful ride. The mountains and valleys were a wondrous site.
When they got there Jenna went to play in the back yard. She heard something in the woods. She went to she what it was. It was a bear and her cub! She had startled it.
Mean while the dos were barking and scratching at the door. The parents got annoyed opened the door. The dogs darted towards where they were they were. When the dogs saw the bear they started to growl and bark. The bear was scared and ran away.
Her and her dogs went home. She had told her parents what happened. So from now n the bring there dogs to Canada with them.
THE END
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7 comments:
Great story but it had alot of spelling errors. Next time reread the story and see if you can make it better.
In the 4th paragraph you put she insted of see and in the last paragraph there is an extra N.
You said that they would she what happened. I love how you used the name Jenna.
I thin the story needs more detail like after jenna and the dogs went home mabe you can tell waht they did and i think it was a little short.
At the end I think it should be"So for now on they will bring their dogs to Canada.
And at the end you should put a ! because that is good news!!!!!!!!!!
I agree with bestactor24 you should reread it.
In the 2nd to last paragraph you spelled dos instead of dog but it was a good story.
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